Something hissed in my ear that day, made it hard to
hear Father say He loved me and I had done no wrong.
I was His shining star, His brightest daughter.
But when it happened, I tell you, I felt dimmed–
I didn’t know this was my desire unto my husband;
that I would lead him to the Truth, to the place
where my sorrow became the moon
shining in the shadow of daybreak.
Soon I saw Error clear as morning, knew Light
from darkness and I glowed with possibility,
forever turning and turning again with
the earth toward the sun.
I grew up that day–in the very hour.
When I spoke my husband heard the new voice.
What could he do but listen, take my hand and
follow when I asked, Well, Adam, are you coming?
Author’s note: Poetry, especially religious poetry is often layered with multiple meanings. This poem represents not only a re-telling of the Garden of Eden story in the voice of Eve, but of the struggle for balance and communion between feminine and masculine energies within the Self. More importantly, it speaks to the relationship between feminism and patriarchy. The voice of Woman is entreating Man to consider a new model, the possibility of something better that has potential to lead us all toward our eventual goal of reunion with God.
Melody Newey
Melody earns a living as a registered nurse, grows a respectable garden, and writes when she's not building sheet forts with her grandkids. Her poetry has appeared in on-line journals, Segullah, Irreantum and small press along the Wasatch Front.
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Beautiful.
Thank you, Leah. For reading and commenting.
Melody,
I am so glad this is today’s post. Wonderful. Thank you.
You’re welcome. Thanks for making a place for poetry here. Rational (and Soulful) Faiths!
This was just for me right Melody? I absolutely love it! Thank you for sharing it with me and hope those other folks enjoy it too!
Yes, Karen — this is just for you! You too, Mike. So glad you like it.
[and so glad the proverbial Eve is finding her voice and we all get to be part of it.]
I haven’t seen this one before. Love it!
Beautiful! My favorite line was “I saw Error clear as morning, knew Light / from darkness and I glowed with possibility”.
I think that’s appropriate not only from the POV of Adam and Eve but also for myself and many other people who come to this site. It’s scary to view things in a different way, but also exciting.
Absolutely beautiful!!
Lovely! I love the last stanza, and that final invitation from Eve to Adam, delivered with just the right amount of sauciness.